I didn't get a chance to make this all nicely mixed in the Multimedia room yet but i feel like I made some improvements. I gutted the cellphone and vocal part (much to my displeasure) managed to get some birds finally and put those in. Lastly THE FRIDGE BUZZ IS INTENTIONAL, when i wake up the thing always seems to go on within a minute so I recorded it going on and mixed it in as much as people might not like that it is part of the room.
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Van,
ReplyDeleteI think it might still be a little unclear as to what exaclty is going on. I like the progression through the piece from the sounds of the birds to your struggle to wake up. I am glad that you decided to go with this approach versus the one with the alarm clock. It is very peaceful but the only problem that I heard was that if I didn't know what the scene was already I don't think I would have been able to tell.
The sounds of the birds at the beginning are great because they give a sense that it is morning. I think bringing out some of your own sounds will benefit the piece and give the listener a better sense of where you are. Overall, nice work : )
ReplyDeleteI agree with Hannah, a little unclear, but better with the birds. I think you might need the cellphone alarm, or some alarm to cue the listener
ReplyDeleteI agree with Emily that the sounds of the birds really give us the sense that it's morning. Also I love the yawning. I don;t really understand the relevence of the other sounds, I can't really tell what they are.
ReplyDeleteyeah the birds are good, and the yawning is helpful. the refrigerator sound is hard to identify though--if i hadn't read your blurb, it would've confused me...
ReplyDeleteI think without the information about the content of the piece I wouldn't understand what you were doing. If there is a sound you could use to bring the listener right into the space, it might help situate the listener without the text.
ReplyDeleteHey Van,
ReplyDeleteI think this is a definite improvement over your last draft but there's still more work to do. The birds are a nice touch (as all the bloggers are saying) but I agree that there might need to be some alarm mixed in.
Also, I think the refrigerator buzz is working in this version. From what I'm hearing it's not overly obtrusive and if you think it's important to the space itself than that's that.
hmmmmmmmmm laaaaaaa. ok. so my thoughts on this one. I don't know what you need, but you need a little something. The groan is nice, the bird is nice, the refrigerator isn't bad...but there needs to be a turning point in the 20 seconds you got. the sound that just nails the peaceful (bc i think you went the peaceful i dont really want to get up, morning route). I just don't know what that sound is. Find it though van! I know you can do it :)
ReplyDelete*snores* haha. This is very melo and peaceful I feel, there doesn't seem like too much going on, but i dont expect anything to happen early in the morning. (did i tell you one time a ninja attacked me while i was brushing my teeth?). I feel like this could be personalized more, what makes you getting up different from everyone else? Add some soundscape that involves you doing something?. maybe.
ReplyDeleteI am still a little bit unclear on what is going on...maybe make the situation come into the clear a little bit faster
ReplyDeletethis piece is really nice, i dont realy know what someof the sounds are and that is my main concern... the sounds are nice tho, i just need some direction of what this is
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