Haiku: Here In My Room (Portfolio Version)

Tried moving things around to make it clearer that its a dorm room.

Any comments?

Audio Portrait: Lying (Portfolio Version)

Hopefully this will be the portfolio version of 'Lying'

Please point out any glaring errors, enjoy.

Car Chase Story: Magical Up All Night Edition

Twelve heart attacks later, heres my new draft.

Another lonely night in the media room. Still far from done but infinitely better.

Comments, suggestions, praise, scorn?

I edited down the story to under 4 minutes and still managed to keep the naked man part, yay. Unfortunately I'm still struggling with it.

I wanted to incorporate the idea of me going back to school and seeing how everything has changed with how Mr. Pittman has changed, yet still remained the same. But i bit off more than i could chew and i had too much tape to go through and didn't know what direction to take this to get to that direction.

What I do know is I'm going to work in more noises, I'm going to hopefully record my friend Matt in his car off campus tuesday to get some more liveliness to the story itself. Comments on what might be a good way to take this now that length isn't an issue would be helpful.

Also Stephanie (Rowden) I've been feeling ill since Festifools yesterday and am not going to be in class today, I would like some guidance from you figuring this piece out though.

Car Chase Story Edit

Rough edit down of 'The Car Chase Story', I haven't normalized or done anything special with this, just cut it down crudely.

normally this story runs over a half hour I had him tell it in 8 and now its been cut down to five.

Let me know what you think in the story is expendable and what isn't.

Not sure if I'll stay with this, If i do i will be adding myself talking about the person telling it and sound effects will be added.

This is a very crude draft right now.